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When they came in they went to the bathroom and pulled out shaving cream, lipstick and alot of other makeup. They also went to the fridge and took out some whip cream and alot more things. When they were done taking stuff out of everywhere they took little by little into the room. " Whip cream? " said demyx in a quiet tone trying not to wake them up. Roxas replied to demyx " yes we already went over this we have everything we need... " Axel and Xigbar rolled over and thought it was still night when it was actually day. Demyx said " are you sure this is a good idea? what if we get caught? " " Demyx my good friend just be quiet and dont tell its that simple... " Roxas pulled out the whip cream and Demyx had the lipstick.



When Axel woke up he felt something strange in his mouth, He tasted.... " WHIP CREAM!! "
thats what he tasted whip cream or either shaving cream. Roxas slept beside Axel so the crap in his hair had a slight chance of getting in his hair too. Seeing how axel was snuggling up to roxas it was a big chance..... but in the end of everything it all worked out..... for now.... O_O
©2008-2009 ~SasukeUchiha2
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i have major writers block cant think im writting new msn chats with the org! O_O

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ah ur writing is okay, it can use some improvements, you shouldnt jump into to things right away like u did with the first chapter, add more detail, and other little things to improve your writing, put more feelings into the characters and describe their emotions better, and what is going on.

Im just trying to help, plz dont be mad!!!!! ><.

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"Some people live their lives while others just survive, I chose to live my life so I struggle and strive, Walk another mile and I stile simle" -Jester, Short Stories, Live My Life.
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ok thank you for letting me know but i dont right it on paper first thats why its short and stuff... >.<

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For every fish i see in the sea i can tell you what i see. i see sixteen fish in this sea, this sea is made for you and me. and i guess him... and her.... you....ok enough!!!
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ok???

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"Some people live their lives while others just survive, I chose to live my life so I struggle and strive, Walk another mile and I stile simle" -Jester, Short Stories, Live My Life.
:iconsasukeuchiha2:
yeah... xD

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For every fish i see in the sea i can tell you what i see. i see sixteen fish in this sea, this sea is made for you and me. and i guess him... and her.... you....ok enough!!!

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